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Toungue Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
I'll start! Blushing

The night. The window. The bed, no wind. No air. Your hand. Your arm. My skin. The lightbulb. The pillow. The colours, the figures. Your eyes shut. my eyes open. Your heavy breathin' my lazy ways of going. The ceiling. Your feet. The touch of the cold walls. The memories of dreams. You're sleepin', I'm awake. You're waking, you're there. The sighs, the kisses. The sweetness of what's missing. The holyness of us. The free spirits around. The shaky fingers floating away. The sheets, the night, the end. All is all, and all is you. All is all, and all is you.

.Feed us love.
Holy the supernatural extra brilliant intelligent kindness of the soul! A. G.
01-15-2008 10:58 AM
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PaulM Offline
Ummagumma

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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
nadius Wrote:I'll start! Blushing

The night. The window. The bed, no wind. No air. Your hand. Your arm. My skin. The lightbulb. The pillow. The colours, the figures. Your eyes shut. my eyes open. Your heavy breathin' my lazy ways of going. The ceiling. Your feet. The touch of the cold walls. The memories of dreams. You're sleepin', I'm awake. You're waking, you're there. The sighs, the kisses. The sweetness of what's missing. The holyness of us. The free spirits around. The shaky fingers floating away. The sheets, the night, the end. All is all, and all is you. All is all, and all is you.
Damn, is it hot in here?

Don't tell me there's no hope at all,
Together we stand, divided we fall.
01-15-2008 01:35 PM
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nadius Offline
Piper at the Gates of Dawn

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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
Blushing

.Feed us love.
Holy the supernatural extra brilliant intelligent kindness of the soul! A. G.
01-15-2008 04:52 PM
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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
nadius Wrote:Blushing

No need to blush nadius, what stronger muse exists than love and passion, the very essence of our beings. I liked it.Happy

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01-15-2008 05:06 PM
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carefulwiththataxeEugene Offline
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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
Here's my best poem:

As we walked along the beach
I thought paradise was within reach
The air was pungent with the smell of trash
Industrial New Jersey lay across the bay
Sending loads of waste our way
Still, I couldn't feel the impending crash

Sandra stopped and turned to me
By a bloated, dead sheep, appropriately
And said those words that I thought I wouldn't hear
She said that being with me was fun
She wouldn't like it if it was done
So could we give it another chance, my dear?

My mouth dropped open, my eyes went wide
I screamed aloud, was petrified
Never had words filled me with so much dread
I turned and ran, never saw her again
She was not fit for the world of men
But of course all this happened inside my head

Outwardly, I forced a smile
Agreed with her, choked back the bile
We resumed our lover's stroll along the shore
All the while, I thought of Jill
Expecting me, and on the pill
Ready to give me everything, and more

So after Sandra ate her fill
And left it to me to foot the bill
I took her home and sped across the park
Jill was in bed, the lights were out
Exactly my plan, with one without
I wasn't there to share her boudoir dark

Her note proclaimed she'd had enough
If I couldn't dump her sister, tough
She wasn't going to wait forever for me
This would not do, I thought, incensed
I would not settle for anything less
So I said Sandra no more was to be

I met her there, outside the door
Of her apartment, on the twentieth floor
She turned and barely registered me there
I took out a pistol and shot her dead
No more, no less, straight through the head
She careened through the window, I didn't care

From such a height, she wouldn't matter
No one could identify the splatter
I made it over to Jill's in time for sup
She greeted me her way, the best
With open arms and naked breasts
You might say life is finally looking up

If it ain't dirty, don't clean it.
01-15-2008 08:07 PM
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PaulM Offline
Ummagumma

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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
Well, it was a little dark, but then it ended with naked breasts, so it was all good.
Viva le boobies!

Don't tell me there's no hope at all,
Together we stand, divided we fall.
01-15-2008 10:20 PM
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Tarantula Offline
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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
carefulwiththataxeEugene Wrote:Here's my best poem:

As we walked along the beach
I thought paradise was within reach
The air was pungent with the smell of trash
Industrial New Jersey lay across the bay
Sending loads of waste our way
Still, I couldn't feel the impending crash

Sandra stopped and turned to me
By a bloated, dead sheep, appropriately
And said those words that I thought I wouldn't hear
She said that being with me was fun
She wouldn't like it if it was done
So could we give it another chance, my dear?

My mouth dropped open, my eyes went wide
I screamed aloud, was petrified
Never had words filled me with so much dread
I turned and ran, never saw her again
She was not fit for the world of men
But of course all this happened inside my head

Outwardly, I forced a smile
Agreed with her, choked back the bile
We resumed our lover's stroll along the shore
All the while, I thought of Jill
Expecting me, and on the pill
Ready to give me everything, and more

So after Sandra ate her fill
And left it to me to foot the bill
I took her home and sped across the park
Jill was in bed, the lights were out
Exactly my plan, with one without
I wasn't there to share her boudoir dark

Her note proclaimed she'd had enough
If I couldn't dump her sister, tough
She wasn't going to wait forever for me
This would not do, I thought, incensed
I would not settle for anything less
So I said Sandra no more was to be

I met her there, outside the door
Of her apartment, on the twentieth floor
She turned and barely registered me there
I took out a pistol and shot her dead
No more, no less, straight through the head
She careened through the window, I didn't care

From such a height, she wouldn't matter
No one could identify the splatter
I made it over to Jill's in time for sup
She greeted me her way, the best
With open arms and naked breasts
You might say life is finally looking up

I like this poem ... I loved reading it and will probably read it again. One suggestion though ... could you change that one girl's name ...? UnsureLaughing

01-16-2008 12:00 AM
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nadius Offline
Piper at the Gates of Dawn

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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
Great stuff!!!!Cool

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Holy the supernatural extra brilliant intelligent kindness of the soul! A. G.
01-16-2008 09:47 PM
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"Capt. Midnight" Offline
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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
I'm good at making little naughty rhymes when I'm in the proper state of mind. You won't find my name on the next, "War and Peace," or ,"The Old Man and the Sea." I do like photograpy.

The grass was greener
The light was brighter
The taste was sweeter
The nights of wonder
With friends surrounded
The dawn mist glowing
The water flowing
The endless river
Forever and ever.
01-16-2008 10:20 PM
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AlansPsychedelicBreakfast Offline
A Saucerful of Secrets

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RE: Post your poetry/ ideas/ songs/ whatever!
There was a young girl from Venus,
whose body was shaped like a .....uh,oh.
Better not do that one!! Blushing

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A Forgotten & Underrated Classic
01-17-2008 12:57 AM
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